Planning a short film

The Over the last two week I have been planning a short film for a college project and also a university portfolio piece. For this film I have had full choose over the piece from writing all the way through to editing ideas. The story is based on a crime/ detective style with a intense story. The story is about a man that comes home and  is being watched through a CCTV camera. The camera follows him as he gets out of the car and goes indoors. The camera also goes into the house and looks around as the man go off to do something (out of frame). When the man returns the camera is slow to reacts and only catches him as he leaves. The outside CCTV camera then shows the man go back to the car and bow wearing a mask, bring out a tried up victim and drags them into the house. The CCTV operator then calls for back up saying that they have got him and need to stop him fast. The man in the house starts grabbing the victim and placing them in a chair, then pacing a rope up as he is about to hang them. Meanwhile the police are on their way and the CCTV is communicating what's happening. Toward the end the police team arrive outside shouting in but the attacker ignores them. The man placed his foot on the chair ready to kick it away from under the victim and the police are shouting in. The CCTV operator can only watch as the man turns and looks directly into the camera. The police run at the front door and as they hit the door the man goes to kicks the chair and the operator gasps, all fades to black and music continue over to credits.

Please let me know what you think as I am filming today and would love all feedback.